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I really don't understand this amendment. Nothing about these two sentences should be controversial.
What is wrong with this language? This seems like common sense to me, and removes the ambiguity of "well she didn't say no..." situations. This puts the burden on the person initiating sex to
make sure the other person actually wants to have sex. Rape victims "shutting down" (rather than struggling or fighting back) when they are assaulted is actually a very common thing, and often used to attack the credibility of the rape victim. This should not be controversial.
I suspect this second sentence is the more controversial one. A lot of people have been saying that it requires people to constantly ask "May I" at every step of sexual encounter. I frankly don't see how you can read it as that. Affirmative consent can be given in many other ways than the super-formal, quasi-contractual "May I insert my penis? Yes, you may" strawman presented, both verbally and non-verbally. All this sentence means is that both parties should feel comfortable with the
entire sexual encounter, and that either party can say "no, I'm not comfortable with this" at any point.