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OP-ED Cheesewhiz gets big backings in Senate race


         This has been a great week for the Cheesewhiz for D3 Senate campaign, as they pick up some big endorsements. With the backing of people such as current D3 Senator PBrunsel and SE Lt. Gov Ian, it also seems that he will most likely get the endorsement from  Frm. Gov. MAS117. But Cheesewhiz also has some sizable opponents stacking up as well. He may have to fight off Gov EarlAW, Boss Tweed, and Senator Masterjedi as some major opposition, however, the overre-action of Tweed and earl to the secession incident will most likely lower credibility oduring the race, giving them little voice.  Currently polls show the public leaning towards Cheesewhiz, but his opponents (Opebo and J-Mann) should be underestimated, especially since polling was done without Opebo on the list and before any endorsements or much campaigning. So with 2 big names backing him, and 2 major opponents silenced, things are looking up for Cheesewhiz The race should definetly be one to watch.

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If you're trying to write in English, you're going to have to do a better job than this. 

Here is my more coherent rewrite of this same article:

This has been a great week for Cheesewhiz, one of the main candidates for the District 3 Senate seat, as he picks up some major endorsements. With the backing of politicians such as the current D3 Senator PBrunsel and SE Lt. Gov Ian, it also seems that he will most likely get an endorsement from former Gov. MAS117.  However, Cheesewhiz has had some major figures endorse his main opponent, J-Mann, a Christian Democrat from Kansas.  Such figures include NE Gov. EarlAW, Boss Tweed, and Senator Masterjedi.  However, the overreaction of Boss Tweed and EarlAW to the Midwest secession crisis will most likely lower their credibility during the race, and blunt the potential impact of their endorsement of J-Mann.

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Would you mind explaining (as coherently as possible) exactly what you meant to say in this paragraph?  I can't make head or tail out of it.   

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Oh, and another thing: could you show me where you got the information about these endorsements and the poll results?  You seem to be privy to this kind of information, and the rest of us (well, me) are not. 

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Maybe this is the Op-Ed you were trying to write?
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This has been a great week for Cheesewhiz, one of the main candidates for the District 3 Senate seat, as he picks up some major endorsements. With the backing of politicians such as the current D3 Senator PBrunsel and SE Lt. Gov Ian, it also seems that he will most likely get an endorsement from former Gov. MAS117.  However, Cheesewhiz has had some major figures endorse his main opponent, J-Mann, a Christian Democrat from Kansas.  Such figures include NE Gov. EarlAW, Boss Tweed, and Senator Masterjedi.  However, the overreaction of Boss Tweed and EarlAW to the Midwest secession crisis will most likely lower their credibility during the race, and blunt the potential impact of their endorsement of J-Mann.

Currently, polls show that D3 residents are leaning slightly in favor of Cheesewhiz, but J-Mann should not be underestimated, especially since these polls were made before any endorsements and campaigning by either of these two major candidates.  Yet, with two big names backing him, and the two other politicians (who endorsed J-Mann) having compromised their credibility prior to this upcoming election, things are looking up for Cheesewhiz.  However, this race should definitely be the one to watch.

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That was exactly what I was trying to write, except you forgot Opebo.

Opebo is a joke candidate who will likely receive only one vote -from himself, or maybe BRTD's.  I think we can safely dismiss his candidacy as having no measurable impact on this race.

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I appreciate the offer, but I am already busy trying to build the Christian Democratic Party, as well as doing job searches in real life.  I doubt I would have the time to juggle yet another responsibility.  So I am going to duck this one. 

You can probably use more practice writing more articles before you get back your groove, and I don't want to stand in the way of that.  However, when I read Op-Eds like this that I perceive as favoring J-Mann's opponent, I will be more critical than most.